Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie charts illustrates the proportion of professional persons spent their day time in specific countries in 1958 and 2008. Units are measured in percentage.
Overall, most of the persons throughout the world dedicate most of the time in working. However, devote minority of the duration travelling to work in 1958 and going out with family or friends in 2008.
To begin with, it is quite evident from the charts that individuals invest higher ratio in working for both of the years. However, sleeping stands after the working with decline fraction of 32% to 25% in 1958 and 2008 respectively. After work and sleep, everyone pass their time relaxing at home inclines with the proportion of 8% in 1958 and 13% in 2008.
Furthermore, playing outdoor and indoor games incline from 6% in 1958 to 7% in 2008. However, going out with family and friends shows significant decline from 19% in 1958 to 6% in 2008. Moreover, the travelling time to go to work and return home alse faces and decline from 2% to 7% in the years 1958 and 2008 respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the charts and makes relevant comparisons. However, there are some inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, you state that travelling time 'faces a decline from 2% to 7%', which is a contradiction as this is an increase. Additionally, the overview is slightly vague, referring to 'professional persons' and 'throughout the world' when the prompt specifies a 'particular country'. To improve, ensure that data points are accurately transcribed and that the overview clearly highlights the most significant trends, such as the major shift in time spent working versus leisure activities, rather than just listing individual data points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'To begin with', and 'Furthermore'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as the transition 'sleeping stands after the working'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus that contributes to the overall progression of the summary.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'professional persons' instead of 'working adults', and 'decline fraction' instead of 'decreased proportion'. The phrase 'everyone pass their time' is grammatically incorrect and stylistically weak. To improve, try to use more precise collocations related to data description, such as 'a significant increase', 'a marginal rise', or 'remained stable'. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' will also help demonstrate a more sophisticated command of the language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The pie charts illustrates'), incorrect preposition usage ('dedicate most of the time in working'), and tense inconsistencies. The sentence 'sleeping stands after the working with decline fraction of 32% to 25%' is structurally confusing. To improve, focus on basic subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions. Proofreading for these common errors will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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