Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart demonstrates the data of the day spent by the working adults on different activities between 1958 and 2008.
In 1958, most of adults were spending their time on work almost 33% people were serious for career. second highest accounted for sleeping about 32% people were spend their time on sleep. after that, 19% contributed for love to spending quality time and going out with friends and family. few percentage people like to relaxing at home they accounted 8% in all over country, only 2% people were travelling to work.
In 2008, people spent more time for work almost 42% and spent time on sleeping was decline compared to 1958 was 32% and 25% in 2008. However, more people like to spent time on relaxing at home about 13% in 2008 and less people have time for going out with family and friends 6%. travelling for work increased and reached to the 7%. in 2008 people were more active in sports about 7% like to playing sports.
Overall, people were more serious for their work in both years but they have had less time for interact with family and friends in 2008.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the pie charts and makes relevant comparisons between 1958 and 2008. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the description of the data is often repetitive and lacks a clear, analytical overview of the trends. While the key changes (such as the increase in work and the decrease in social time) are identified, the report would benefit from a more precise synthesis of the data rather than simply listing percentages. The inclusion of 'sports' in 2008 is a good observation, but the overall structure of the summary could be more professional and concise to better highlight the significant shifts in time allocation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or missing. Transitions between sentences are frequently abrupt, such as 'after that, 19% contributed for love to spending quality time'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the logical flow between the two time periods could be improved by using more sophisticated linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'conversely', 'meanwhile'). The paragraphing is present, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs is inconsistent, making the text feel somewhat disjointed.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. There is a reliance on basic phrasing, such as 'people were serious for career' and 'people like to spent time'. Some word choices are unnatural or inaccurate, such as 'contributed for love to spending' and 'people were more active in sports about 7% like to playing sports'. To improve, you should focus on using more academic collocations and precise terminology related to data description, such as 'accounted for', 'witnessed a decline', or 'represented a significant portion'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'most of adults were spending'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'people like to spent time'), and missing articles or prepositions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and missing capital letters at the start of sentences. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents the writing from reaching a higher band score. Focus on mastering basic sentence structure before attempting more complex forms.
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