Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided pie charts illustrate the ratio of day spent by working adults in a certain nation spent their time between 1958 and 2008.
Overall, in both years 1958 and 2008, young people spent their most time by working while the least time in travelling to work. In 2008 adults also spent some time in playing sports.
In 1958, youngsters invest 33 percentage of their time in working whish was the greatest time of a day while the lowest ratio of time 2 percentage in travelling to work. In the same way, they spent nearly two-tenth (19%) by going out with friends/ family. 8 % of the people relax at home and thirty two percent of people love to sleep.
In 2008, the highest percentage (42%) of people likes to invest their time same as in
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is incomplete, as it cuts off mid-sentence in the second paragraph and fails to cover the 2008 data fully. Because the essay is under the 150-word minimum and remains unfinished, it fails to provide a complete overview or report all main features. The attempt to compare 1958 and 2008 is present but lacks the necessary depth and completion required for a higher band. To improve, you must ensure you complete your analysis of all data points and meet the minimum word count requirement to allow for a full development of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay attempts to use paragraphing, but the abrupt ending disrupts the logical flow. While there is an attempt at an overview, the lack of completion makes it difficult to assess the overall progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used in a basic way, such as 'In 1958' and 'In the same way', but the overall structure is undermined by the unfinished nature of the text. To improve, focus on completing your sentences and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, finished thought before moving to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'invest their time' are used incorrectly in this context, and there are errors in word choice, such as 'ratio of day' instead of 'proportion of the day'. The use of 'youngsters' is slightly informal for an Academic Task 1 report. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology for describing data, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', or 'allocated', and ensure your collocations are natural.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('youngsters invest', 'people likes') and awkward phrasing ('spent their most time by working'). The sentence structures are generally simple, and the incomplete final sentence demonstrates a lack of control over complex structures. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and practice using a wider variety of sentence structures accurately.
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