Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This pie chart illustrates the knowledge about adults workers in a specific country, and how they spent their time in ,1958 to 2008.

To began with, In 1958 when people consume 19% from their time with their families and friends, and they had 32% time for sleeping moreover, travelling was only 2%, furthermore, they used 33% of time for working and finally, they utilize 8% of their time for relaxing at home.

secondly, In 2008 when youngster timing had been changed, that time they worked for 42% in their time which increased 7% from 1958. They used 13% of their time for rest at homes, and it was also more than previous century, In addition, In 2008, their sleeping routine had reduced if we compare it to 1958, It was 25%. They spent 7% from their time for travelling and this time percentage massive from past time, additionally, they used 6% for family and friends in 2008, after all, they spent 7% for playing sports and this was extra activity which was include in year of 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the charts, such as the increase in working hours and the decrease in time spent with family. However, the report lacks a clear overview or summary of the main trends, which is essential for a Band 6 or higher. The data presentation is somewhat mechanical, simply listing percentages rather than synthesizing the information to make meaningful comparisons. While the task is addressed, the lack of a clear summary and the inclusion of irrelevant commentary (e.g., 'youngster timing') limits the effectiveness of the response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often repetitive and sometimes misused, such as starting sentences with 'To began with' or 'after all'. The progression of ideas is occasionally disjointed, and the referencing (e.g., 'that time') is unclear, making it difficult to follow the logical flow between the two time periods. More varied and accurate linking words are needed to improve the overall flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic phrasing like 'spent their time' and 'percentage'. There are several instances of awkward word choice, such as 'knowledge about adults workers' and 'massive from past time', which impede clarity. The student attempts to use some descriptive language, but the lack of precision in word choice and collocation prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Expanding the range of vocabulary to include more precise terms for describing trends and data is necessary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with verb tense consistency (e.g., 'To began with', 'was include'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, which makes the text difficult to read. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to a lack of clarity. To improve, the student should focus on basic sentence construction and ensuring consistent use of past tense when describing historical data.

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