Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The pie chart illustrates the how the adults spent their day in 2 years on various activities.
Overall, it is comparisons of the two years to how adults how they spent their time in various activities.
In 1958 the adults mostly spent their 33% time on the worked and 19% percent are only available for their family and friends.They do not go vacation only 2% of the adults are going their .At their resting time they sleep 32% but they do not going anywhere they prefer relaxing at home .
In 2008 adults facing the work pressure more they had 42% of their work and they also facing some consequences for increasing their working pressure .6% only meet their family and friends and enjoyed .Although, traveling is 7% increases as compared to the other. Adults have less time only 25% for the sleeping . In this year they show interest in playing sports also they increase 7% in activities
The pie chart illustrates the how the adults spent their day in 2 years on various activities.
Overall, it is comparsions of the two years to how adult they spent their time in various activities.
In 1958, the adults mostly spent their 33% of time on the working and 19% are only available for family and friends. They do not go vacation only 2% of the adults are going. At their resting time they slept. They do not prefer to going anywhere they always perefer to spent their time for the relaxation at home.
In 2008 adults facing the work pressure more they had 42% of their work and also facing some consequences for increase worked. Only 6% of meet their family and friends Although, travelling is increased 7%. Adults have less time for the sleeping they only had 25%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear, accurate summary of the data. The report is repetitive, as the student essentially writes the same content twice. Furthermore, the analysis is flawed; for instance, the claim that adults in 2008 were 'facing work pressure' is an interpretation not supported by the data provided in the charts. The overview is weak and lacks a clear comparison of the main trends. Key features, such as the significant shift in work hours and sleep, are mentioned but lack precise reporting and logical synthesis. To improve, focus on identifying the most significant changes and grouping data logically rather than listing percentages in isolation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. The most significant issue is the repetition of the entire response, which indicates a lack of planning and control. Paragraphing is present but ineffective because the second half of the essay simply restates the first half with minor variations. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and often incorrect way, such as the misuse of 'Although' at the start of a sentence. The progression of ideas is hindered by this repetition, making the text difficult to follow. To improve, ensure each paragraph introduces new information and use linking words to connect ideas rather than just listing facts.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There is frequent misuse of word forms, such as 'the worked' instead of 'work' and 'the sleeping' instead of 'sleep'. Phrases like 'facing the work pressure more' are awkward and unnatural. The student relies on basic, repetitive language to describe the data, failing to use a range of vocabulary suitable for a report (e.g., 'increased', 'decreased', 'remained stable'). Spelling errors are also frequent, such as 'comparsions' and 'perefer'. To improve, focus on learning collocations related to data description and ensuring the correct part of speech is used in sentences.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'adults facing the work pressure' (missing auxiliary verb) and 'they do not going anywhere'. Sentence structures are simple and often fragmented. Punctuation is also problematic, with misplaced commas and periods. The lack of control over basic tenses and sentence construction makes the text difficult to read. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, specifically the use of auxiliary verbs and correct verb forms, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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