Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Information about how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008 are presented in the bar chat. Most different types of activities shown are spent by working adults.
Overall, the highest percentage is shown for sleeping, Whereas Traveling to work recorded the lowest. Meanwhile, working increased significantly, while relaxing at home remained stable throughout the period.
To begin with, Sleeping recorded 65% adults in 1958, compared with slightly decreased 10% in 2008. Meanwhile, Relaxing at home at least 8% and grew at 13% in 2008. Regarding, The remaining percentage was recorded for working at 33% in contrast increased 42% in 2008.
On the other hand, In 1958, Going out with friends and family accounted for 19% and decreased 6% in 2008. According, Traveling to work dropped at 2% activities rather than increased dramatically 7% adults in 2008. Finally, Playing sports roughly 7% activities in 2008.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task, but there are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting. For example, stating that sleeping decreased by '10%' when the charts show a much larger shift, and misinterpreting the 'working' figures, indicates a failure to accurately report the main features. The overview is present but lacks clarity due to the confusing phrasing. While the response covers the categories, the data interpretation is often incorrect or poorly explained, which prevents a higher score. To improve, ensure that the data points are accurately transcribed and that comparisons are made logically between the two years.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear transitions. While cohesive devices like 'Meanwhile', 'On the other hand', and 'To begin with' are used, they are often placed incorrectly or do not logically connect the ideas. For instance, the transition 'According, Traveling to work...' is grammatically and logically incoherent. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow because the sentences do not build upon each other effectively. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each sentence follows a logical sequence would significantly enhance the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'bar chat' (instead of pie chart) and 'slightly decreased 10%' (which is mathematically confusing). The phrasing 'dropped at 2% activities rather than increased dramatically 7%' is unclear and does not convey the intended meaning effectively. The student relies on basic vocabulary and struggles to use terms related to data trends (e.g., 'remained stable', 'increased') with precision. To improve, focus on learning collocations for describing trends, such as 'a significant increase' or 'remained constant'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'Information... are presented', and incorrect preposition usage, such as 'grew at 13%'. Sentence structures are often fragmented or poorly constructed, making the text difficult to read. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the simple sentences used often contain errors in punctuation and word order. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that prepositions are used correctly with numerical data.
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