Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given two pie charts depicts the information about working adults in a specific nation spent their time from 1958 to 2008
In an overall, it is crystal clear that maximum time spent on working in both years. However, minimum spent on travelling to work.
After anazlying it, it can be seen that in 1958 mostly adults spent more time on going out with friends/ family than 2008 about 19%. In
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, as it is only 71 words long. Consequently, the response is significantly underdeveloped. While the student attempts to identify some trends, such as the time spent working and socializing, the analysis is incomplete and lacks the necessary detail to provide a comprehensive summary of the data. The response does not cover all parts of the task, failing to describe the full range of categories or provide a meaningful comparison between the two years. The lack of sufficient content prevents the development of a clear overview or a detailed report.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is too short to demonstrate effective paragraphing or a logical progression of ideas. While there is a basic attempt at an introduction and an overview, the text ends abruptly mid-sentence. Cohesive devices are minimal and mechanical, such as 'In an overall' and 'After anazlying it'. The lack of sufficient length makes it impossible to assess the student's ability to organize information or use cohesive devices effectively across a full response. The structure is fragmented and lacks the necessary flow required for a coherent academic report.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'maximum time spent' and 'minimum spent' are basic and lack the precision required for describing data trends. There are also errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'anazlying' instead of 'analyzing'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey complex information or make accurate comparisons. To improve, the student needs to incorporate a wider variety of topic-specific vocabulary related to data analysis, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuation', 'significant', and 'marginal'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The given two pie charts depicts') and missing articles or prepositions ('maximum time spent on working'). The sentence structures are simple and incomplete, and the text ends mid-sentence, which prevents the use of a range of complex structures. The frequent errors and the lack of sentence variety significantly hinder the clarity of the writing. To reach a higher band, the student must focus on basic sentence construction, correct verb forms, and the appropriate use of articles.
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