Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart illustrates working teenagers in specific country spent their time in 1958 to 2008
After analyzing the graph as we see in 1950 a vast majority of people sleep although 32 percent individuals sleep at home but 19 percent of people found outside and hang out with their family members at last 2 percent only travelling to work
Furthermore in 2008 numerous number of people are working like 42 percent even though 7 perfect are playing sports or travel to reach on their work place but 25 per cent of people are only sleep as compare to 1958
Overall in 1950 people are sleeping more but in 2008 individuals are working much as Compare to earlier
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the development of the task. While you have identified some data points, the report is incomplete and lacks a clear overview of the main trends. The description of the data is often inaccurate (e.g., referring to 'teenagers' instead of 'working adults' and misinterpreting the categories). To improve, ensure you cover all categories provided in the charts and provide a clear summary of the most significant changes between the two years. The current analysis is too brief and lacks the necessary detail to fully address the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is disjointed. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and sometimes incorrect way, such as the misuse of 'although' and 'furthermore'. The lack of logical flow makes it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between 1958 and 2008. To improve, use clear topic sentences for each paragraph and ensure that linking words are used to connect ideas logically rather than just acting as sentence starters.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'people' and 'sleep' throughout the text. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'numerous number of people' and 'reach on their work place'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'significant', 'fluctuated', or 'remained stable'. Avoid repeating the same words and focus on using more precise terminology to describe the trends shown in the charts.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., '32 percent individuals sleep'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence structures. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and punctuation. Try to incorporate a mix of simple and complex sentences, and pay close attention to verb tenses, ensuring they are consistent when describing past data.
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