Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

In 1958 19 percent rate of a adults going out with our families and friends. In 1958 adults spend a good time to his families and spend a loot time with his friends. And the rate of travelling is very low its 2 percent which is very good adults usually sleeping at home and the rate of sleeping is 32 percent nd the rate of relaxing is 8 percent and the working rate is usually 33 percent.

the peak value in 1958 is working and sleeping which is very good and sleeping is quite necessary

and after sleeping and relaxing again go back to work.

in modern days now a days in 2008 the rate of adults playing sports is 7 percent ,rate of going with our family and friends is 6 percent and rate of travel to work is 7 percent and the rate of sleeping is 25 percent and rate of relaxing at home is 13 percent and the rate of working is 42 percent.

and in 2008 the peak value is working because they know the condition of our house so adults also need to be work.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear overview or a structured comparison. The data is presented as a list of statistics rather than a cohesive report. Furthermore, the inclusion of personal opinions, such as 'which is very good' or 'they know the condition of our house', is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 response, which requires an objective summary of the data. Key trends, such as the significant increase in working hours or the decline in sleeping time, are not highlighted effectively. The response lacks a clear summary of the main features as required by the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. While there are paragraphs, the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and often repetitive, such as the constant use of 'and the rate of'. There is no clear introduction or conclusion, and the transition between the 1958 data and the 2008 data is abrupt. The lack of linking words makes the text difficult to follow, and the referencing is often unclear, which hinders the overall flow of information.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on simple phrases like 'the rate of' and 'is'. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'increased', 'decreased', 'fluctuated', or 'remained stable'. Spelling errors, such as 'loot' instead of 'lot' and 'nd' instead of 'and', are present. The word choice is often informal and imprecise, failing to meet the requirements for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple, repetitive sentence structures. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'adults spend a good time to his families') and tense usage. Punctuation is inconsistent, and there is a lack of complex sentence structures. Many sentences are grammatically incomplete or awkward, which makes the text difficult to read and understand. The frequent errors in basic grammar significantly impede the clarity of the report.

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