Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The figure illustrate how mature employee spend their time in one of the countries between 1958 and 2008.
overall in 1958 working and sleeping was equal while in 2008 working takes the dominant proportation.
The smallest proportion shown of travel for work in 1958 has got 2% only while it is slightly increases through the years upto 2008 reaching 7%.
Going out with family 1958 showed 19% where it declined to 6% in 2008.
Meanwhile tavle for work were slightly more than triple in2008 in conparong with 1958.
playing sports remains constant 7% all through the study and relaxing at home leaped approximatly 1.5 time from 1958 to 2008 from 8% to 13% however sleeping was 32% and declined to 25% in 2008.
In concluduion working was most dominant in both pie chart while travel for work was the least in 1958 as well as going out with friend/family in 2008 showd 6%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the task by identifying main features and making comparisons. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention the dominant category (work) and the least significant ones, the report lacks a clear, structured overview of the trends. Some data points are presented in a list-like fashion rather than being synthesized into a coherent comparison. For instance, the mention of 'travel for work' is repeated, and the connection between the categories could be more analytical. To improve, ensure you group related data points logically and provide a more comprehensive summary of the overall shifts between 1958 and 2008.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. The progression of ideas is often disjointed, with sentences appearing as isolated facts rather than a cohesive report. Cohesive devices are limited and sometimes used incorrectly, such as the abrupt transition in the final paragraph. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the lack of linking words makes the flow of information feel mechanical. To improve, use a wider variety of cohesive devices (e.g., 'whereas', 'in contrast', 'subsequently') to connect your sentences and ensure that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate to convey the basic meaning, but it is quite repetitive and contains several errors in word choice and spelling (e.g., 'proportation', 'tavle', 'conparong', 'concluduion'). You rely on basic verbs like 'showed' and 'declined'. While you attempt some descriptive language like 'leaped', the overall range is limited. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant increase', and ensure you proofread for spelling accuracy, as these errors occasionally distract the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There is a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You struggle with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The figure illustrate', 'working and sleeping was equal') and tense consistency. There are also frequent punctuation errors and missing articles. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of grammatical slips hinders the fluency of the text. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensure that your sentences are punctuated correctly. Practicing the use of complex sentences with subordinate clauses will also help improve your range.
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