Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The pie charts illustrates, percentage of individual are working adults on various activities.
Overall it can be seen that, the adult in a particular country spending there time in the year between 1958 to 2008. Many adolescent are working in lots of country and spending there time like travelling sleeping playing sports.
To begin with, in the year 1958 the adult they spent there time going out with there kit and kens around 19 percentage.and travelling to working 2% hence Relaxing at home 8%.however the people are playing a different games and comfortable the life.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. The content is underdeveloped and lacks a clear summary of the main features or meaningful comparisons between the two years. The student mentions some categories, such as 'travelling' and 'relaxing', but fails to accurately report the data provided in the charts. The response is too brief to provide a coherent overview or detailed analysis, resulting in a failure to cover the requirements of the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. While there are attempts at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are disjointed and do not follow a clear progression. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the awkward use of 'To begin with' followed by fragmented sentences. The referencing is unclear, and the overall flow of information is disrupted by the lack of logical connections between the sentences. The response does not demonstrate a coherent arrangement of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often inappropriate for an academic report. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as 'kit and kens' (likely a misuse of 'kith and kin') and 'comfortable the life'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the data accurately, and the repetition of basic structures hinders the clarity of the message. The student struggles to use precise terminology related to data description, such as 'percentage', 'proportion', or 'increase/decrease'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('The pie charts illustrates'), incorrect verb tenses, and improper sentence construction. Many sentences are fragmented or lack a clear subject and predicate. Punctuation is also problematic, with periods placed incorrectly within sentences. The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. The high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to follow.
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