Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given pie charts shows the comparision of time spent on their daily routine including their work in a particular country between the year 1958 and 2008. The comparision showed in percentages
Overall, By comparision it known that adults are keeping more concentration on their work in 2008 as comapared to year 1958. And people who are doing work to earn were give less priority to spent time with their family in 2008.
At first, According to 1958 pie chart, adults give their time each and every routine in their life. Here giving more priority to their working professional is indeed they contribute 33% of time to it. And at second comes with taking care of self which including sleeping has contribution of 8% and 32% respectively. Additionally, adults are spending time with family with 19% and they traveling to workpalace contributes only 2% which is lower compared to others.
On the other hand, Has time passed with generation changes followed by increasing in family responsibilities adutls are doing more work in 2008 era which is 9% more of 1958. And in 2008 era they gave less priority to others as compared to 1958, like relaxing at home, sleeping, playing sports, spending time with family are with 15%, 25%, 7%, and 6% respectively. Moreover traveling time was increased in 2008 with 5% due to traffic on road.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the pie charts and makes relevant comparisons between 1958 and 2008. However, there are inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, you state that work accounted for 33% in 1958, whereas the chart indicates 33% for 'sleeping' and 8% for 'work'. Additionally, the description of the 2008 data is somewhat confusing, particularly the claim that work increased by 9% from 1958. While you identify the key trends, the lack of precision in data interpretation prevents a higher score. Ensure you double-check the figures against the visual data to avoid misrepresenting the information.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'At first' and 'At second', which are not standard ways to introduce points in a report. The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when discussing the changes between the two years. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would significantly enhance the flow of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is repetitive and lacks precision. You rely on basic phrasing like 'give their time' and 'doing work'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'comparision', 'comapared', 'workpalace', and 'adutls', which distract the reader. To improve, you should aim to use more varied and precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'accounted for', 'constituted', or 'a significant shift', and ensure you proofread for basic spelling mistakes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('The given pie charts shows'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward phrasing ('Has time passed with generation changes'). Some sentences are difficult to parse due to these errors, although the overall meaning remains understandable. Focusing on basic sentence construction and ensuring consistent verb tenses will help improve clarity and accuracy.
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