Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The Pie chart illustrates the porportion of young people use their working time from 1958 to 2008 and measured in percentage.
According to the chart , Age group from 18 - 25 spend thier precious time working for their own companies other then that they waste there time in sleeping.
Initially, Working was the major means of spending the day by working adults by continuing the same portion it rose from 33% to 42% between 1958 to 2008. Showing the similar trends Relaxing at home got adabted by 5% more then before whereas Travelling to work also comply with above pattern by 3% .
on the other hand , 32% of the time was invested on slepping which decreases by 4% as compared to 1958. likewise hanging out with friends or family reduces by massive gap of 13% at the end of 2008 and in 1958 playing sports was 10% and it becomes 7% in 2008.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to accurately interpret the data. You have misidentified the subject of the charts as 'young people' and '18-25 age group', whereas the prompt specifies 'working adults'. Furthermore, the inclusion of subjective commentary, such as describing time spent working as 'precious' or sleeping as 'wasting time', is inappropriate for an academic report. While you have attempted to report on the main features and trends, the misinterpretation of the data source significantly impacts the accuracy of the summary. To improve, focus strictly on the objective data provided in the diagrams and avoid adding personal opinions or external information not present in the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is hindered by the inaccurate interpretation of the data. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Initially', 'on the other hand', and 'likewise', but they are sometimes used mechanically or inappropriately given the context of the data. For instance, the transition 'on the other hand' is used to introduce a decrease, but the connection between the ideas lacks clarity. The referencing is also problematic because the subject of the report is incorrectly identified, making the flow of information confusing for the reader.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and contains several errors in word choice and spelling. Examples include 'porportion' (proportion), 'adabted' (adopted), and 'slepping' (sleeping). The use of informal language like 'hanging out' and 'waste there time' is not suitable for an Academic Task 1 report, which requires a formal, neutral tone. You should focus on using precise terminology related to data description, such as 'increased', 'decreased', 'proportion', and 'significant', while avoiding colloquialisms and spelling errors that distract from the clarity of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There is a limited range of grammatical structures, and the response contains frequent errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'The Pie chart illustrates the porportion of young people use their working time' (missing relative pronoun/incorrect structure) and 'Age group from 18 - 25 spend thier precious time' (missing article/subject-verb agreement). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces before commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles. Attempting more complex structures before ensuring accuracy in simple sentences often leads to the errors seen here.
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