Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I am writing here the percentage of the day spent by working adults on various activities and i will divide it into section or two eras first one is of 1958 and second is 2008 according to the reports of 1958 the adults going out with friends or family is 19% it means that 19% adults are going out with their family and friends for fun and outing for good time pass for some fun activities and next percentage is 2% which is of travelling to work only 2% adults going out for work travelling next is 32% which for sleeping adults and 33% for working adults and the adults workers relaxing at home their percentage is 8%.Now i am going to describe the reports of 2008 adults workers the percentage of going out with family and friends is 6% and playing sports is 7% and travelling to work is 7% and slepping is 25% and working adults percentage is 42%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the task by describing the data from the two pie charts. However, it fails to provide a clear overview or summary of the main trends, which is a requirement for Task 1. The information is presented as a list of data points rather than a comparative analysis. While the figures for 1958 and 2008 are mentioned, the lack of synthesis and the absence of a concluding summary or comparison between the two years significantly limits the achievement of the task. The writing is descriptive but lacks the analytical approach required for an Academic Task 1 response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow. The text is essentially one long block of information. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; the transition between the description of 1958 and 2008 is abrupt, using only 'Now i am going to describe'. The progression of ideas is mechanical and repetitive, relying on simple listing rather than logical grouping of data. To improve, you should use clear paragraph breaks and a variety of linking words to compare and contrast the data points effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'good time pass' and 'fun activities' are informal and not suitable for an academic report. There is a lack of variety in reporting verbs and nouns related to data description. For example, the word 'percentage' is used repeatedly. You need to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to trends and data, such as 'accounted for', 'witnessed a rise', or 'remained stable'. The spelling of 'slepping' is also incorrect, which further impacts the lexical score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response consists mostly of simple, repetitive sentence structures. There is a lack of complex sentences, which are necessary to achieve a higher band score. Punctuation is largely absent, with many run-on sentences that make the text difficult to read. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'the adults going out... is 19%' (subject-verb agreement) and 'i will divide it into section' (missing article/pluralization). The consistent use of lowercase 'i' is also a recurring error that affects the overall accuracy of the writing.

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