Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie charts demonstrates how the youngsters that work utilize their time in a specific country from 1958 to 2008. The data has been calibrated in percentages

Overall, it is crystal clear that the youngsters changed their habit from enjoying to working in huge percentage also they are doing many new activates but one important thing that is noticed that they now spend less time with family and friends

In 1958, young adults spend time with family and friend was 19 percent which reduced to 6 percent in 2008. Travelling to work rose from 2 to 7 percent. The sleeping cycle was decreased from 32 to 25 percent. Relaxing at home increased from 8 to 13 percent. The working status climbed to 42 percent from 33 percent. The largest time spend by adults on work and the least on travelling that was 33 and 2 percent respectively

In 2008, new activate also started by adults that was playing sports which was 7 percent. In this year the largest time spend by adults on work which was 42 percent that was little bit low from half whereas the time spend with family and friends was the lowest in this year which was 6 percent

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the charts, but there are significant issues with accuracy and interpretation. You incorrectly refer to the subjects as 'youngsters' or 'young adults' throughout, whereas the prompt specifies 'working adults'. Additionally, the description of the data is sometimes imprecise; for example, stating that 42% is 'little bit low from half' is informal and lacks analytical precision. While you identify key trends like the increase in work and the decrease in time spent with family, the summary lacks a clear, cohesive overview of the most significant shifts between the two years. To improve, ensure you accurately identify the subjects and use more formal, objective language to describe the data trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally repetitive. Phrases like 'In 1958' and 'In 2008' are used to start paragraphs, but the internal flow between sentences is often disjointed. For instance, the transition between discussing specific percentages and the concluding summary of the 2008 data is abrupt. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') to connect your ideas more fluidly and improve the logical progression of your analysis.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for higher bands. You use informal phrasing such as 'crystal clear', 'little bit low', and 'new activate' (which is a grammatical error for 'activities'). The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on basic verbs like 'climbed', 'rose', and 'decreased'. To improve, incorporate more sophisticated collocations and academic terminology suitable for describing statistical data, such as 'experienced a significant decline', 'remained relatively stable', or 'accounted for a substantial proportion'. Avoid informal, conversational language in an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the clarity of the text. Examples include 'The pie charts demonstrates' (subject-verb agreement), 'youngsters that work utilize' (awkward phrasing), and 'new activate also started' (incorrect word form). The sentence structures are mostly simple or compound, with limited attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several missing commas and full stops. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct word forms (e.g., 'activities' vs 'activate'), and practice constructing more complex sentences using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to demonstrate a wider grammatical range.

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