Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The pie charts demonstrate how time was spent by employeed adults in a specific country in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, the time spent on going out with friends and family and for sleeping decreased in 2008; however, spending of time on other activities increased. There was no noticable change observed on time spent for playing sports.

In 1958 and 2008, most amount of time was allocated for working across all activities, accounting for 33% and 42%, respectively. The time spent for sleeping in 2008 reduced to 25% from 32% in 1958; however, it maintained the second position across the activities.

The portion of time spent for going out with friends and families decreased from 19% in 1958 to 6% in 2008, reaching to a last position from third position, whereas the time spent for travelling to place of work increased to 7%, jumping from a last position to a second-last position. The time spent on plaving sports accounted no significant chage.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided relevant comparisons between the two years. You covered all categories shown in the charts and highlighted the most significant changes, such as the rise in working hours and the decline in socialising. However, the report could be improved by including more precise data comparisons. For instance, while you mention the percentage for working, you could explicitly contrast the growth or decline of all categories more effectively to show a clearer overview. The summary is accurate, but ensure that all data points are clearly linked to the years provided to avoid any ambiguity.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The response is logically organised with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'however', 'whereas', and 'respectively' to link ideas. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the overview from the detailed analysis. To reach a higher band, ensure that the flow between sentences is smoother; some transitions feel slightly mechanical. Additionally, ensure that referencing is precise—for example, when you mention 'last position', it would be clearer to state 'the lowest percentage' to improve the professional tone of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly. Phrases like 'allocated for', 'accounted for', and 'maintained the second position' are used effectively. There are some minor errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'employeed' (employed), 'noticable' (noticeable), and 'plaving' (playing). While these do not impede communication, they prevent the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' to avoid repetition and demonstrate a more sophisticated command of academic vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are some grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'most amount of time was allocated' (the largest amount) and 'reaching to a last position' (reaching the last position). Additionally, 'accounted no significant chage' is grammatically incorrect and should be 'showed no significant change'. While these errors are noticeable, they do not cause difficulty for the reader. To improve, focus on article usage (the/a) and prepositional phrases to ensure your sentences are error-free and more fluent.

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