Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie charts given below illustrates the information about the spending time of adults working in particular country in 1958 and 2008.
Overall, the charts demonstrates the activities of adults in different categories in 1958 and 2008. The most notable feature of charts is that the working time gradually increased in 2008 while in 1958 they spend almost 33% their time at working space. Furthermore, the ratio of relaxing time at home rose, In contrast to 1958 they were spend less time at home to relaxed.
On the other hand, the sleeping time effected by giving more time at working space, it gradually decreased to 25%, whereas in 1958, they were sleeping with the percentage of 32% in whole day. Moreover, the pie charts shows great impact on the time they spend with their family and friends outside in 2008, while in past 19% of the time sho
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, as it is incomplete and ends abruptly mid-sentence. While you have identified some main features, such as the increase in working time and the decrease in sleep, the analysis is underdeveloped. You have not fully reported on all categories shown in the charts, and the lack of a complete conclusion or final summary significantly impacts the task achievement. To improve, ensure you cover all data points provided in the diagrams and provide a clear, comprehensive overview that synthesizes the information rather than just listing individual changes. The incomplete nature of the response prevents a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive start. However, the logical flow is hindered by the incomplete ending. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore', 'In contrast', and 'Moreover', the connection between ideas is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as the transition in the second paragraph. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the abrupt termination of the text disrupts the overall coherence. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, completed thought that leads naturally into the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You rely on basic phrasing such as 'spending time' and 'great impact'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'working space' instead of 'work' or 'employment', and 'sleeping time effected by' instead of 'affected by'. To improve, try to incorporate more academic collocations and precise terminology related to data description, such as 'a significant shift', 'proportion', or 'fluctuation'. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you avoid repetitive phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'The pie charts given below illustrates' contains a subject-verb agreement error, and 'they were spend less time' is grammatically incorrect. You rely mostly on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors, such as 'the sleeping time effected by giving more time at working space'. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and tense consistency. Additionally, practice using complex structures like relative clauses or passive voice more accurately to demonstrate a wider grammatical range.
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