Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The two pie charts illustrates how adult spent their day in a typical country on six activities in from 1958 to 2008. Overall, working accounted the largest share which rose significantly by 2008. Moreover, travelling to work, relaxing at home and playing sports rose in the second graph. In contrast, going out with friends/family and sleeping showed a decreasing trend.

In 1958, working had highest proportion of 33% which rose to 42% by 2008. Similarly, playing sports showed modest rise from 3% to 7%, travelling to working showed from 2% to 7%, relaxing at home grew up from 8% to 13%.

However, initially sleeping was the second highest value of 32% which showed a fall to 25% over fifty year of period. Following similar trend going out with friends/family even fell sharply from 19% to 6% by 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response provides a clear overview of the main trends and identifies key changes between 1958 and 2008. You successfully highlight the increase in working hours and the decrease in sleep and socialising. However, the response is under the 150-word minimum, which limits the depth of your analysis. To improve, ensure you provide a more comprehensive breakdown of the data points and ensure you meet the length requirement to fully develop your ideas. While the main features are reported, the lack of sufficient length prevents a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a clear overview. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Moreover', 'In contrast', and 'However' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel slightly abrupt. The referencing is generally clear, but the progression of ideas could be smoother. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that each paragraph transitions naturally into the next to enhance the overall readability of your report.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'accounted for', 'proportion', and 'modest rise'. There are some minor errors in word choice, such as 'travelling to working' instead of 'travelling to work' and 'grew up from' which is slightly unnatural in this context. While you communicate the information effectively, the range of vocabulary is somewhat limited and lacks the precision required for higher bands. Expanding your repertoire of reporting verbs and comparative phrases would significantly improve your lexical score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are several grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'The two pie charts illustrates' (subject-verb agreement), 'adult spent' (pluralisation), and 'over fifty year of period' (preposition/article usage). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall accuracy. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage, as the report requires careful handling of past and present data points.

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