Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Here the below pie chart illustrate the how working adults in a particular nation spend their time in two different year 1958 and 2008 in 6 different sources.

Overall, the dominant source was working almost similar in both year. The lowest contributing source was a travelling to work.

In 1958, mostly adult prefer working and sleeping at home and it cover more than 50% of the pie chart. The both source working and sleeping almost same in a 1958. In 2008, the 42% of the majority people prefered working outside the home. After that the second most dominant source is going out with friends and families in 1958 and it was almost 20%.

In 2008,the second most dominant source was a sleeping and it was almost 25%.the lowest sources was contribute in both year was a playing sports and travelling to work both are similar it almost 7% and 2%. However, adults choose to stay at home and take a rest was almost same in 1958 and 2008. After that, 3 different sources in 2008 was a travelling to work, going out with friends and family and playing sports it covers almost 20% of the pie chart.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the data, but it fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the main features. The description of the data is often confusing and inaccurate; for example, stating that 'working' was similar in both years when the charts show significant changes. The information is presented in a disorganized manner, and the comparisons are often vague or mathematically incorrect. The response lacks a clear focus on the most significant trends, and the interpretation of the pie charts is inconsistent, making it difficult for the reader to follow the data trends effectively. To improve, focus on identifying the most prominent changes and grouping data logically rather than listing figures in a disjointed way.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'After that' and 'In 1958/2008'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to track which data points are being compared. The transition between sentences is often abrupt, and the lack of clear signposting makes the overall structure feel disjointed. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the internal flow within those paragraphs is not sufficiently developed to guide the reader through the comparison of the two time periods.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'source', 'dominant', and 'prefer', which are often used incorrectly in this context (e.g., referring to categories as 'sources'). There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'the lowest sources was contribute' and 'mostly adult prefer working'. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of the information being presented. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on using more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'category', 'fluctuated', or 'remained stable', and work on improving the accuracy of word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('the pie chart illustrate', 'the lowest sources was contribute'), incorrect article usage, and awkward sentence structures. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the simple sentences used often contain errors that distract the reader. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of commas and capitalization. While the meaning is generally discernible, the persistent grammatical inaccuracies significantly limit the quality of the writing. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be a beneficial next step.

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