Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The pie charts illustate the proportion of adults how they spent their hours in diffrent activities between 1958 and 2008.
Overall, working hours remained the largest share in both years, while travelling to work accounted for smallest share in the beginning but rose slightly in 20's. In addition, going out with family experienced a noticebale deceased over the year.
In 1958, adult consumed their most time in working activity at 33% which was more than the tripple the figure for travelling to work at 2%. Sleeping activity stood at 32% made up the second largest share. By 2008, the proportion for working rose slightly to 42% while sleeping hours declined marginally to 25%. Travelling to work rose subtaintially from 2% to 7% over the year.
In contrast, playing sports constituted for 7% in both years while tha the proportion for relaxing hours experienced a significantly decreased from 8% to 13% in 1958 and 2008 respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the data and makes relevant comparisons between the two years. However, there are some inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, you state that relaxing hours 'decreased from 8% to 13%', which is a mathematical contradiction, and your description of the 2008 figures for relaxing is unclear. While you identify the key trends, such as the rise in working hours and the decline in sleep, the lack of precision in reporting the data points limits the score. To improve, ensure that all figures cited are accurate and that comparisons are logically consistent.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. There is a clear progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'In addition' and 'In contrast'. Furthermore, there are some referencing issues, such as the phrase 'over the year', which is used repeatedly but is not the most natural way to describe a 50-year period. The overall structure is coherent, but the flow between sentences could be improved with more varied linking words.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, including terms like 'proportion', 'constituted', and 'marginally'. However, there are several spelling errors ('illustate', 'diffrent', 'noticebale', 'deceased', 'subtaintially') and word choice inaccuracies ('tripple the figure', 'adult consumed their most time'). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader, though they do not fully impede communication. To reach a higher band, you should focus on accurate spelling and more precise collocations when describing statistical trends.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'proportion of adults how they spent', 'travelling to work accounted for smallest share', and 'the proportion for relaxing hours experienced a significantly decreased'. These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable, although the meaning remains clear. You need to work on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and verb forms to improve your accuracy. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical slips will help you achieve a higher score.
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