Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given pie chart depicts the information about the proportion of working individuals spent their free time doing several activities in a certain nation in the year 1958 and 2008.
Having a brief look on the chart it is evident that in 1958, adults who worked was a third in the country. Most of the grown up people prefer sleeping in their leisure time as accounted by 32% whereas others like to going out with family or friends as represented by 19%. There was a difference of 6% between the folks who is relaxing at home or travelling to work.
Further delving into the information, in 2008, working was popular among people as comprised by 42% while sleeping was not quite far as compared to working. Likewise, Travelling to work was almost popular as playing sports though going with the friends contributed smallest proportion in the year.
To sum up, it can be vividly manifested that the maximum number of humans love sleeping in their time off while the minimum were like either travelling to work or going out with family in both 1958 and 2008.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the data but fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the main features. The description of the data is often vague; for example, stating 'working was popular' or 'sleeping was not quite far' lacks the precision required for Task 1. Furthermore, the interpretation of the data is inconsistent with the provided charts, as the student struggles to identify the key trends or make meaningful comparisons between the two years. The response lacks a clear summary of the most significant changes, which is essential for a high score in this criterion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as 'Further delving into the information' or 'To sum up'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two time periods. The logical flow is hampered by the lack of clear links between the data points, resulting in a somewhat fragmented presentation of the information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'grown up people', 'humans', and 'folks' are inappropriate for an academic report. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'as comprised by 42%' and 'contributed smallest proportion'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is not sufficient to demonstrate the flexibility or precision required for higher bands. To improve, the student should focus on using more formal, academic terminology and precise reporting verbs.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'adults who worked was a third', 'others like to going out', and 'folks who is relaxing'. Subject-verb agreement and preposition usage are inconsistent throughout the text. While the student attempts to use complex structures, these are often faulty. A greater focus on basic grammatical accuracy and sentence construction is necessary to improve the overall quality of the writing.
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