Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The two pie charts compare the proportion of time spent by youngster on several activities between 1958 and 2008.

Overall, It is clearly evident that working category remained the dominant segment in both years, while travelling to work accounted for the smallest share in initial year. In addition to this, All activities witnessed significant growth in the following year except going out with family or friends and sleeping.

Looking First at the largest categories ,IN 1958, Working activity accounted for 33% before rising dramatically to 42% in 2008. Similarly, Sleeping also experienced an decline ,changing from 32% to 25% over the same period.

By contrast, the remaining activities made up relatively smaller proportions, other interests or playing sports, traveling to work and relaxing at home changing from 6% ,2% and 8%in 1958 to 8%,8% and 13% respectively, While, going out with family represented for sharp fall in 2008 from 19% to 6%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the charts and makes relevant comparisons. However, there are some inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, you state that sleeping experienced a decline from 32% to 25%, but the charts show it changed from 32% to 25% (which is correct), yet you also claim 'all activities witnessed significant growth' except sleeping and going out, which is a confusing generalization. Furthermore, you misidentify the group as 'youngster' instead of 'working adults'. While the main trends are identified, the lack of precision in data interpretation and the misidentification of the subject matter prevent a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In addition to this', 'Looking first at', and 'By contrast'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as the capitalization errors ('IN 1958') and the punctuation issues around 'While, going out'. The progression of ideas is generally logical, but the flow is occasionally interrupted by these minor mechanical errors. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the overview from the detailed body paragraphs.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'dominant segment', and 'dramatically'. However, there are several word choice and collocation errors, such as 'represented for sharp fall' (should be 'represented a sharp fall') and 'working activity' (should be 'working'). Additionally, the term 'youngster' is inappropriate for the context of 'working adults'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main points, the errors in collocation and the misuse of specific terms limit the score to the 6.0 band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, including capitalization issues ('Overall, It is clearly evident', 'IN 1958'), subject-verb agreement issues, and incorrect article usage. For example, 'experienced an decline' should be 'experienced a decline'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher band score. You have attempted some complex structures, but the lack of consistent accuracy in basic grammar and punctuation is a recurring issue throughout the text.

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