Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Both pie charts display how working adults habits of spending their time has been changed from 1958 to 2008 in a specific country.

Overall, the time spent in working increased and the sleeping time deceased. Relaxing at home showed an increase. Travelling to work also showed a similar trend as of relaxing at home. Going out with family or friends declined over the time.

The working hours and travelling to work showed an increase from 33% to 42% and 2% to 7% respectively in the year 1958 and 2008. Following that there was increase in relaxing at home time, which was at 8% in the year 1958 and 13% in the year 2008. Playing sport seemed unchanged over the time.

Going out with friends or family declined from a healthy proportion of 19% to 6% over the years 1958 and 2008 respectively. One noticeable drop was decline in sleeping time, which was 32% in the year 1958 and declined to 25% in the year 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response covers all key features of the data, including the main trends and specific comparisons between 1958 and 2008. You successfully identified the increases in working and travelling, as well as the decreases in sleeping and socialising. The overview is clear and provides a good summary of the major shifts. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are accurately attributed to the correct years; for instance, you mentioned '1958 and 2008' when describing the 33% to 42% increase, but the phrasing could be more precise to avoid ambiguity. Overall, the task is well-addressed with relevant data selection.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organised into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. The progression of ideas is clear, moving from general trends to specific data points. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Following that' and 'respectively', to link information. However, the transition between sentences could be smoother; some sentences feel slightly disjointed. Additionally, the use of 'Following that' is a bit mechanical. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing is consistently clear would help elevate the flow of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'declined', and 'noticeable drop'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'habits of spending their time has been changed' (should be 'habits... have changed') and 'deceased' (which means died; you likely meant 'decreased'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the sophistication and precision required for higher bands. Incorporating more varied synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' would strengthen your lexical range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'Both pie charts display how working adults habits... has been changed' (subject-verb agreement and passive voice issues) and 'as of relaxing at home' (incorrect prepositional phrase). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions. The attempt at complex structures is evident, but accuracy needs to be more consistent.

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