Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pic charts demostrate that the percntage of the day spent by working adults on various activities. between 1958 and 2008.
In 1958 the largest number of adult working which is 33% and in 2008 it increased upto 42%. Then next largest percentage was sleeping 32% in 1958 and it is decrease to 25% in 2008. Next the 3rd most % was 19% going out with friends and family but in 2008 it fall to 6%. After that the largest part is relaxing at home was 8% in 1958 and it rise upto 13% in 2008. From the charts we notice that in 1958 the playing sports was 6% which is expand 7% in 2008.Finally the last one is travelling to work, which one was 2% in 1958 and grow up to 7% in 2008. Here we notice that working % gradually increase day by day and the % of pleople sleeping is decline day by day. on the otherhand going out with friends and family is drmatically decrease day by day.
In conclusion , here we observe that the percentage of the day spent by working adutls changes day by day, some activities are clime and some are drop.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response provides a basic overview of the data, but it fails to effectively highlight the main trends or make meaningful comparisons. While the student identifies the changes in percentages, the report is essentially a list of data points rather than a cohesive summary. The inclusion of 'day by day' is inaccurate, as the data represents two specific years (1958 and 2008), not a continuous daily progression. The overview is weak, and the lack of analytical grouping of the data prevents a higher score. To improve, focus on identifying the most significant shifts (e.g., the increase in working hours versus the decline in sleep) rather than listing every category.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the flow of information is mechanical and repetitive. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often misused, such as the repetitive use of 'Next' and 'Finally'. The transition between sentences is often abrupt, and the concluding paragraph does not effectively synthesise the information, instead repeating the same inaccurate observation about 'day by day' changes. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making the progression of ideas feel disjointed. Improving the use of linking words like 'in contrast', 'conversely', or 'meanwhile' would help create a more logical flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic verbs like 'increase', 'decrease', 'rise', and 'fall'. There are frequent errors in word choice and form, such as 'demostrate' (demonstrate), 'percntage' (percentage), 'clime' (climb), and 'pleople' (people). The student struggles to use precise terminology for describing trends, often resorting to informal phrasing like 'grow up to' or 'the last one is'. To reach a higher band, the student needs to expand their range of synonyms for change and ensure accurate spelling and word formation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the largest number of adult working which is 33%'), tense consistency, and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple or contain structural errors, such as 'which one was 2% in 1958 and grow up to 7% in 2008'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. The lack of complex sentence structures limits the score, as the writing relies on basic, often fragmented, clauses.
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