Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The drawing illustrates how the youth youngsters utilizes their time in a multitude number of countries the time between 1958 till 2008. upon initial observation, the data reveals a striking divergence in trends between the monitored subjects over the given period.
While the metric corresponding working 42 percent of the day spent by working adults in 2008 experienced a pronounced and significant shift, the associated with the working is 33 percent in the period of 1958 during working hours displayed a remarkable steady trajectory, remaining comparatively stable throughout the entire timeframe.
sleeping ratio is declined till 2008, in addition travelling to work is surged till 7 percent, going out with peers and family is massively declined 19 percent to 7 percent.
Upon closer examination of the statistical distribution, it become immediately apparent that the proportion attributed relaxing at home is 13 percent in 2008 vastly overshadowed the the corresponding metric for relaxing at home is 8 percent by a substantial margin. More specifically, the former registered at an impressive features in adults of activities in 1958, whereas the latter trailed significantly behind, resting at modest in 2008, respectively
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The information presented is often confusing or factually inconsistent with the provided charts. For example, the description of 'working' hours is contradictory, and the mention of 'youth youngsters' is inaccurate as the prompt specifies 'working adults'. Key features are not highlighted effectively, and the lack of clarity in reporting the percentages makes it difficult for the reader to follow the trends. To improve, focus on identifying the most significant changes and grouping data logically rather than listing isolated figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical flow. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the sentences within the paragraphs are disjointed and often lack clear cohesive devices. Phrases like 'upon initial observation' are used, but the subsequent sentences do not follow a coherent structure. Referencing is frequently unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the comparison between 'relaxing at home' in 1958 and 2008 is muddled and grammatically broken. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the readability.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'multitude number of countries' (which is not supported by the prompt) and 'sleeping ratio is declined'. The repetition of 'metric' and 'corresponding' suggests an attempt at academic tone, but the misuse of these terms hinders clarity. The student struggles with collocations, leading to sentences that are difficult to interpret. A wider range of precise vocabulary related to describing trends and data would be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'it become immediately apparent'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Many sentences are structurally incomplete or convoluted, such as 'the associated with the working is 33 percent in the period of 1958'. The reliance on simple sentence structures with frequent errors in complex constructions limits the score. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would help improve the accuracy of the writing.
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