Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given chart depicts the working hours of adults in foreign countries.lets analyse this chart from different angles in following paragraphs. If we make comparison of different years,we see that in 1948 the ratio of people going out of country with their family or friend was 19 percent.While ratio of adults going for work was 2 percent.On contrary to these the young people sleeping or resting at home was 32 and 8 percent.Working young generation was about 33 percent . On the other hand ,if we look in 2008 ,we see adults going out of country with their family or friends was about 7 percent while relaxing and sleeping generation at home was 25 and 13 percent.Working adults were about 42 percent.The youth spending time on sports was about 7 percent. Overall the we see the working ratio in youth has increased in 2008,which is about 42 percent as compared to previous years.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to accurately report the data provided in the prompt. You have misidentified the years (using 1948 instead of 1958) and misinterpreted the categories (e.g., 'going out of country' instead of 'leisure' or 'socializing'). The task requires a clear summary of the main features, but your report is fragmented and contains significant factual inaccuracies. Furthermore, you refer to 'young people' and 'youth' throughout, whereas the prompt specifically refers to 'working adults'. To improve, ensure you carefully read the labels on the charts and report the data precisely as presented, rather than making assumptions about the demographics or activities.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. The introduction is informal and unnecessary, and the paragraphing is erratic, with large gaps and inconsistent spacing. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices like 'On the other hand' and 'Overall', the progression of ideas is disjointed. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two time periods. To improve, focus on using clear topic sentences for each paragraph and ensure that cohesive devices are used to link related ideas rather than just starting new, disconnected sentences.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. Phrases like 'going out of country' to describe leisure time and 'relaxing and sleeping generation' are unnatural and do not accurately reflect the data. There is also a lack of variety in reporting verbs and comparative language. You rely on basic terms like 'ratio' and 'working hours' repeatedly. To reach a higher band, you should use more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', 'experienced a rise', or 'remained stable', and avoid informal phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles (e.g., 'in 2008, we see adults'), incorrect punctuation (e.g., spaces before commas), and subject-verb agreement issues. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. The misuse of capitalization and the fragmented nature of the sentences impede the flow of the writing. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including the correct use of articles and prepositions, and practice combining simple sentences into more complex structures using subordinating conjunctions.
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