Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
the given pie chart illustrates the information about the consumption of time spent by adults on different activities in 5 decades.
to commence with, in 1958 people usually spent most of their energy on working and sleeping which is about 33% and 32% respectively. however other lesiure activities are demonstated lesser interest in compare to the other which includes providing time to family and friend, travelling to work, and relaxing at home which is 19%.2% and 8% simultaneously.
on the other hand, In the year 2008 above 18 year students divide their spare time into 6 variation which is not prevalent in the last 5 decades. to explicate it, they utilise their maximum time in sleeping, working and relaxing at home which is certainly about 25%, 42% and 15%. atlast, the remaining time consist outdoor activities such as going out with homies and mates are 6% and playing sport or travelling work is 3 % and 7% respectively.
overall, people preferences in time management had changed a lot in 50 years. but the trend of giving the time to work and sleep has steadily unchanged. rest activities got minimal importance in compare to that.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, but the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. While you identify key trends, there are inaccuracies in data reporting, such as stating '19.2%' for family/friends, which is not clearly supported by the visual data provided. The overview is present but lacks a clear synthesis of the most significant changes, such as the shift in working hours. To improve, ensure that data points are transcribed accurately and that the overview highlights the most striking differences between the two years rather than just listing categories.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'atlast' and 'simultaneously' (used incorrectly to mean 'respectively'). The progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and a lack of smooth transitions between sentences. While the paragraphing is logical, the internal cohesion within paragraphs needs more variety and precision to achieve a higher band score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. There are several instances of inappropriate word choice, such as 'homies and mates' (too informal for an academic report) and 'demonstated lesser interest' (incorrect collocation). Additionally, there are spelling errors like 'lesiure' and 'atlast'. To improve, focus on using more formal, academic vocabulary and ensure that collocations are used correctly to convey information clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('people preferences... had changed'), incorrect preposition usage, and punctuation errors. For example, '19.2% and 8% simultaneously' is grammatically confusing. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for articles, verb tenses, and sentence structure will significantly improve your accuracy.
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