Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart illustrates the proportion of the day how working adults in a one nation spent their time Between 1958 and 2008.
Overall, it can be clearly seen that working was highest category in 2008, while travelling to work was least proportion in 2010. Travelling to work and playing sports was similar proportion in 2008.
In 1958, Working and sleeping were approximately similar proportion in category, which were a 33% and 32%. Going out with friends and family proportion of 19% respectively while, relaxing at home and travelling to work were different proportion 8% and 2%.
By 2008, working was highest proportion category followed, proportion was a 42%. Travelling to work and playing sports were accounted for similar proportion 7% and 7% whereas, Going out with friends and family was least proportion in during the period 6% of proportion. sleeping and relaxing at home 25% and 13%. The one is highest proportion of then second.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview of the main trends. While it identifies some key figures, the analysis is often inaccurate or confusing. For instance, the student mentions '2010' when the data only covers 1958 and 2008. Furthermore, the description of the data is disjointed, and the comparison between the two years lacks clarity. The report fails to highlight the most significant changes, such as the shift in working hours or the decline in social activities, instead providing a list of percentages that are difficult to follow. The information is not effectively synthesized.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the internal flow is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, such as 'The one is highest proportion of then second' at the end of the text, which is unintelligible. The progression of ideas is not logical, and the referencing is frequently unclear. While there is an attempt to use transition words like 'Overall' and 'whereas', the lack of clear sentence structure makes the relationship between the data points difficult to track. Paragraphing is present but does not effectively group related information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic terms like 'proportion', 'category', and 'similar', often using them incorrectly or in awkward collocations, such as 'Working and sleeping were approximately similar proportion in category'. There are frequent errors in word choice that hinder the reader's understanding, such as 'least proportion in during the period'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with precision, and the phrasing is often unnatural, indicating a lack of control over academic register.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with article usage ('the proportion of the day'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack necessary verbs, such as 'Going out with friends and family proportion of 19% respectively'. The student struggles to construct complex sentences correctly, and the punctuation is inconsistent. While some simple sentences are understandable, the high frequency of errors throughout the text makes it difficult to read and demonstrates a limited command of English grammar.
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