Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This pie chart describes two percentages of adults spending their time on various activity. As in year 2008, a large number of adults spendt42% time on working as compared to in 1958. A 32% people spent their time on sleeping rather than in year 2008. This means in year 2008 people are more motivated regarding doing their work and they spent minor part on other activities. Such as; going out with family and travelling to work. In 2008 adults also knew that physical activities or sports are also important for healthy mind. In conclusion, people spend their time wisely as instead of previous years data. And also spent small amount of time for relaxing at home and spending time with their loves one's. This pie chart helps us for understanding data easily rather than reading theory that is boring.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement. While you identify some data points, the summary is incomplete and lacks a clear overview of the main trends. The analysis is largely subjective (e.g., claiming people are 'more motivated' or that reading data is 'boring'), which is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report. You need to focus strictly on reporting the data provided in the charts rather than offering personal opinions or interpretations of the charts' utility. To improve, ensure you cover all categories and provide a clear comparison between the two years.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks a logical structure. It is written as a single paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; for example, the transition between the description of the charts and your personal conclusion is abrupt. The use of 'Such as;' as a sentence fragment is grammatically incorrect and disrupts the flow. To improve, you should organize your response into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and two body paragraphs detailing specific data points. Use linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', and 'subsequently' to connect your ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic phrasing such as 'spent their time' and 'a large number of'. There are also errors in word formation and collocation, such as 'loves one's' instead of 'loved ones' and 'previous years data' instead of 'data from previous years'. The tone is overly informal for an academic report. To reach a higher band, you should use a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'allocated', 'accounted for', 'experienced a shift', and 'remained constant'. Avoid colloquialisms and personal commentary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'This pie chart describes two percentages of adults spending their time on various activity' (should be 'activities'), 'spendt' (spelling error), and 'A 32% people' (incorrect article usage). Your sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and the accurate use of tenses. Practice combining simple sentences into complex ones using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to demonstrate a wider grammatical range.

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