Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The comparison of working hours spent by the adults on different sorts of practices was demonstrated by the pie charts in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, it is clear that in the initial year, people spent their maximum hours on working, while the same trend was seen in 2008 also. However, the least preference was given to travelling to work and going out with family in both years.

In 1958, the most favorable activity was working, recorded as 33%, this percentage was closely followed by the sleeping, as 32% and the minimum hours were utilized on travelling to work. Furthermore, adults used 19% of their day o going out with family and half of this percentage was on relaxing at home.

Probing further, in 2008, as similar to the past, working was on the highest position with 42%, Sleeping was stood at 25%, whereas the same proportion of hours was spent on playing sports and travelling to work, calculated as 7% each. Additionally, 13% of their time people used on relaxing at home and adults did not like to go out with their family much.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of the two pie charts and making relevant comparisons. You successfully highlighted the primary trends, such as the dominance of working hours in both years. However, the analysis could be more precise; for instance, you mention 'the least preference was given to travelling to work' in 1958, but the data shows 'relaxing at home' was actually lower (9.5% vs 8%). Additionally, the description of 2008 could be more analytical by explicitly contrasting the shifts in percentages rather than just listing them. Overall, the response is clear and fulfills the requirements of the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on the specific years. You use cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'Probing further', and 'whereas' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical or forced, such as 'Probing further', which is not the most natural choice for a data description task. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two time periods, which helps the reader follow the progression of information. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking phrases that integrate more naturally into the flow of your sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'initial year', 'proportion', and 'calculated as'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'Sleeping was stood at 25%', which is grammatically awkward, and 'different sorts of practices', which is not the most natural collocation for time-use data. While you attempt to use less common vocabulary, some phrasing remains slightly repetitive or imprecise. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations related to data reporting, such as 'accounted for', 'constituted', or 'witnessed a shift'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. Examples include 'the comparison... was demonstrated by the pie charts in 1958 and 2008' (the charts show the data, they do not demonstrate the comparison), 'Sleeping was stood at 25%' (incorrect passive voice), and '13% of their time people used on relaxing' (awkward word order). These errors do not impede communication, but they do indicate a need for more careful proofreading and a better grasp of passive versus active voice constructions in academic writing.

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