Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The pie chart shows data of how working adults spent there time in in particular country in the year 1958 and 2008
The majority of working adults spent the time on their work place the is about of 33%The less 1% from this the adult spent their for sleeping.19% of adults are used time in going outside with friends and family and spent time with them. 8% of worker used time i rekacing in their homes and give time to relax there body and mind. A little less to this some adult workers spent time in playing sports. Only 2% of w
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 102 words. Furthermore, the response is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence ('Only 2% of w'). Because the response is unfinished, it fails to provide a summary of the main features or make necessary comparisons between the two years. The data provided is sparse and lacks the analytical depth required for an Academic Task 1 response. To improve, you must complete the task by covering all data points and ensuring the response meets the length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical organization and paragraphing. There is no clear progression of ideas, and the text is composed of disjointed sentences rather than a cohesive report. Cohesive devices are entirely absent, making the text difficult to follow. The abrupt ending further disrupts the flow of information. To improve, you should group related information into distinct paragraphs—such as an introduction, an overview of trends, and specific details—and use linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' to connect your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'rekacing' (relaxing) and 'there body' (their body). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or data effectively. You rely on basic, inaccurate phrasing like 'The less 1% from this'. To improve, you should learn specific vocabulary for describing data, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuate', 'account for', and 'significant', and focus on using these terms in the correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar is highly inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. There are persistent errors in basic sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and pronoun usage (e.g., 'spent there time in in particular country', 'adults are used time in going'). The lack of complex sentence structures and the presence of fragmented, incomplete sentences make the writing difficult to read. You need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb-object patterns, and proofreading for common errors like 'there' versus 'their'.
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