Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The pie charts illustrates how employed individuals in a specific nation use their time in the year 1958 and 2000 doing numerous different activities. The units used to measure is percentage.
Overall, the maximum amount of time spend in both the years is on working, which is followed by sleeping. People spend the same amount of time in playing sports in both the years mentioned 6% being in 1958, while 7% being in 2008.
Activities like Working , Relaxing at home, Traveling to work has significantly increased in the year 2008 as compared to 1958. On the contrary sleeping and going out with friends/family has decreased significantly in the year 2008.
In the year 1958, travelling to work consumed the least time at 2%, while working consumed the most at 33%. Similarly in 2008, playing sports, going out with friends/family and playing sports were almost equally divided, being in the section of lesser activity done in comparison to working which was done the most at 42%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, but the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. While you identify the most significant changes, such as the increase in working hours, the description of the data is occasionally inaccurate. For instance, you state that 'working' increased, but the data shows it rose from 33% to 42%, which is correct; however, your claim that 'relaxing at home' increased is not supported by the provided data (which shows a decrease from 19% to 13%). Furthermore, the comparison of 'playing sports' is slightly repetitive. To improve, ensure that your data points are meticulously checked against the diagrams to avoid factual errors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'In the year 1958', and 'On the contrary' to link ideas. However, the progression within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear. For example, the final paragraph lists several activities as being 'almost equally divided', which is a vague way to describe the data. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'employed individuals', 'consumed', and 'significantly increased'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'the units used to measure is percentage' is grammatically awkward, and 'lesser activity done' is not natural English phrasing. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'accounted for', 'witnessed a rise', or 'remained stable', rather than relying on simpler verbs like 'done' or 'spend'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('The pie charts illustrates', 'The units... is percentage') and tense inconsistencies ('time spend' instead of 'time spent'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall clarity. Focusing on basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring consistent verb tenses when describing past data will significantly improve your accuracy.
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