Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart depicts how the working professionals spend their time in between year 1958 to 2008.
Firstly, In 1958 most of the individual spent their time in working and sleeping accounting for 33% and 33% and 22%respectively. It is observed that in the 1958, more individuals prefer to enjoy their time with their love once. While in the 2008, this personal gathering is reduced to 65.
In addition to that, it shows that in 2008 the amount of working of individuals is increased by 9%. Along with that, the time consumed for travelling had also been increased by 5%. In 2008, personnel prefer to relax at home for relaxing rather than spending time for social gathering. In 1958, the amount of time spending on spending and working is approximately same, while, in the 2008 the amount of sleeping had been reduced and working had increased
Overall, the pie chart depicts the activities performed by the working professionals from year 1958 to 2008.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to accurately report the data. There are significant factual errors, such as stating that personal gathering reduced to 65 (which is not supported by the data) and claiming that time spent on 'spending' (likely a typo for sleeping) and working were the same in 1958, which contradicts the provided figures. The overview is weak and lacks a clear summary of the most significant trends. The response fails to highlight the key differences between the two years effectively, leading to a confusing presentation of the information. To improve, ensure that data points are transcribed accurately and that the overview focuses on the most prominent changes rather than listing minor details.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is hindered by inaccurate data reporting and awkward phrasing. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'Firstly', 'In addition to that', and 'Overall', they are sometimes used mechanically or inappropriately. The referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when discussing the changes between 1958 and 2008. The flow of ideas is disrupted by the lack of clarity in the comparisons, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended analysis. Improving the use of linking words to show contrast and sequence would help create a more cohesive response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'personnel' instead of 'people' or 'individuals', and 'spending' used in a context that is unclear. The phrase 'love once' is a misspelling of 'loved ones'. The vocabulary is generally basic and lacks the precision required for an academic report. To achieve a higher band, you should focus on using more precise terminology to describe trends, such as 'increased by', 'remained stable', or 'a significant shift', and ensure that your spelling and word choice are accurate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'in between year 1958 to 2008' (incorrect preposition usage), 'most of the individual spent' (subject-verb agreement error), and 'the amount of working of individuals is increased' (awkward passive construction). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas and spacing issues. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction limits the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct prepositional phrases will improve your accuracy.
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