Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie charts illustrates the proportion of different categories of working adults in a specific country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Overall, the charts highlights that most of the teenagers spent most of the time in 1958. Meanwhile, it also gives us the information about working percentages of 2008.
Initially, in 1958, most of the adults consumed a great amount of time on sleeping and working while percentage is 52% and 33% respectively. in contrast to this ,the percentage of sleeping falls to 25% and in 2008. At the same time, the percentage of the working rises significantly. to 42%.
Secondly, minimum value is travelling to work which is 2%. The travelling process is increased to 7% in 2008 while relaxing at home was 5% in 1958.The percentage of playing sports in bot years are similar. The value of going out with family declined from 19% to 6%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to accurately interpret the charts. You incorrectly identify the subjects as 'teenagers' when the prompt specifies 'working adults'. Furthermore, the overview is vague and does not effectively highlight the most significant trends. While you mention some figures, the analysis is disjointed and lacks a clear comparison between the two years. To improve, ensure you carefully read the prompt to identify the correct subjects and focus on grouping data logically rather than listing individual figures, which makes it difficult for the reader to grasp the main features of the data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as using 'Initially' and 'Secondly' to list data points, which does not reflect the nature of the information. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between sentences feels abrupt. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words that show relationships between data (e.g., 'in contrast', 'whereas', 'similarly') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, such as grouping categories that increased versus those that decreased.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely on basic verbs like 'spent', 'is', and 'rises'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'the travelling process is increased' and 'playing sports in bot years are similar'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with precision. To improve, try to incorporate more varied verbs for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'witnessed a decline', and ensure you use precise nouns to describe the categories provided in the charts.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The pie charts illustrates', 'the charts highlights', 'percentage of playing sports... are similar') and punctuation errors, such as the placement of periods and spaces ('in contrast to this ,the percentage'). Sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at more complex sentences are often marred by errors. To improve, focus on basic subject-verb agreement and proofread your work to ensure correct punctuation and capitalization, especially at the start of sentences.
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