Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given graph's describe the working adults of any country they spend there time in 1958 and 2008.

Overall,the graphs show the maximum and minimum persentange of working adults spend the day in various activities.

In 1958 the adult spend most time on working and only few tiem spend for travelling and few time for relaxing at home and a huge time for sleeping but less then to working and few time of day spend to the friend.

On the other hand in 2008 the working time is increase and sleeping time is decrease relaxing and traveling time is already increase but the time spend on their friends in decrease and a few time is safe for playing sports but in 1958 the playing time is nothing the persentage of time table in 2008 is 6, 7, 25, 13, 42, and persantage in 1958 is 19, 2, 32, 8, 33.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear, accurate summary of the data. While it mentions the two years, the description of the trends is highly confusing and lacks analytical depth. The attempt to list percentages at the end is disorganized and does not effectively compare the data points. The response lacks a clear overview of the main trends, and the information provided is often inaccurate or difficult to follow. To improve, you must focus on identifying the most significant changes—such as the shift in working hours—and describing them clearly rather than simply listing numbers.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'and' to connect clauses. The transition between the description of 1958 and 2008 is abrupt, and the final paragraph is particularly difficult to follow due to the lack of clear referencing. The structure does not facilitate a smooth flow of information, making it challenging for the reader to understand the comparisons being made between the two time periods.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice and spelling (e.g., 'persentange', 'tiem', 'persantage'). There is a lack of variety in the language used to describe trends or data. Phrases like 'a huge time' or 'a few time is safe' are unnatural and imprecise. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your range of vocabulary to include more precise terms for describing data, such as 'increased significantly', 'remained stable', or 'accounted for'. Currently, the limited range and spelling errors hinder the clarity of the report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The given graph's describe'), tense usage (e.g., 'working time is increase'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, making them difficult to parse. There is almost no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the basic sentences used are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and article usage.

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