Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given pie charts illustrate the percentage of working adults of any country spent their time i 1958 and 2008.
overall, the percentage of sectors working ,relax at home and travelling to work is increased and sectors sleeping and going with family decreased. On the other side the sport sector remain same .
The pie graph shows that the working ratio in 1958 is 33% which increases to 42 % in the2008 . The pie graph illustrates that the ratio of relaxing at home adults is 8%in 1958 and becomes 13% in 2008 by increasing . The charts shows that the sector travelling to work is 2%in 1958 which increases to 7 % in 2008 . On the other hand the sport ratio remain the same in both years . The sector going with family is 19 % in 1958 which decreases to 6 % in 2000 . The sleeping sector is 32 % in1958 which becomes 25 % by decreasing
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts and makes relevant comparisons. However, the overview is somewhat simplistic and contains inaccuracies, such as stating that the 'sport' sector remained the same, which is a misinterpretation of the data. While the key trends are identified, the analysis lacks depth and the reporting of figures is repetitive. To improve, you should focus on grouping data more logically and ensuring that your summary accurately reflects the visual information provided in the diagrams.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes repetitive (e.g., 'The pie graph shows that... The pie graph illustrates that...'). The transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is abrupt. To achieve a higher band, you should use a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more fluidly, and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'increase' and 'decrease'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'going with family' and 'sectors working'. The range is insufficient to convey the information with precision. To improve, try to incorporate more varied verbs and nouns to describe trends, such as 'fluctuate', 'decline', 'proportion', and 'figure', and ensure you use them in the correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the sport sector remain same'), tense usage, and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several spacing errors around punctuation marks. While the meaning is generally clear, these errors are frequent and distract the reader. You should focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for minor mechanical errors like spacing and capitalization.
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