Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given pie charts show working adults in a particular nation use their time in 1958 and 2008.
In 1958 the working adults in particular nation spend their maximum time working and minimum time on travelling to work . It changes in 2008 the maximum time is spent on the work but minimum time is spent on going out with friends and family.
In 1958 people spend 33 percent of their daily time on working and 8 percent at relaxing in home.People spend 32 percent of their daily time sleeping . People in 1958 spend huge time with freinds and family compared to the 2008 , They spend 19 percent of their time on it . People in 1958 spend 6 percent of their daily time on sports .
The 2008 is different from the 1958 people spend 42 percent of their time on work which is huge compared to the 1958. people spend 13 percent of their time relaxing at home which is also higher than 1958. people spend 25 percent time on sleeping which is less time which people get sleep in 1958 . Biggest difference is in going out with friends and family in 1958 people spend 19 percent but in 2008 only 6 percent , on travelling time has increased to 7 percent. playing sports is almost same, 6 percent in 1958 and 7 percent in 2008.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data and makes relevant comparisons between 1958 and 2008. However, the overview is weak; it lacks a clear summary of the most significant trends, such as the increase in work hours and the decrease in sleep. The data is presented in a somewhat repetitive, list-like fashion rather than being synthesized into a cohesive analytical report. While all parts of the task are addressed, the lack of a clear, overarching summary and the reliance on listing individual percentages prevents the response from reaching a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is mechanical. The use of cohesive devices is very limited, relying heavily on simple sentence structures and repetitive phrasing like 'People spend' or 'In 1958'. There is a lack of linking words to show contrast or transition between the two time periods, which makes the flow feel disjointed. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the paragraphing does not effectively group related information to guide the reader through the comparison.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits the ability to describe the data with precision. Phrases like 'huge time' and 'maximum time' are used repeatedly, and there is little attempt to use a wider range of academic vocabulary to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'witnessed a significant rise'). While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of variety and the occasional awkward phrasing (e.g., 'relaxing in home') indicate a limited range of lexical resources.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies almost exclusively on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('in particular nation', 'in 2008 the maximum time'), prepositions ('relaxing in home'), and verb tense consistency. While the errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be distracting. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, which prevents the demonstration of a wider grammatical range. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several instances of missing or misplaced spaces after commas and periods.
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