Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie graphs illustrates about the time spended by old workers in a specific country between the years 1958 and 2008.
Overall, pie graphs shows working was maximum around 33 percent in 1958 while working increased from 33 to 42percent in 2008 remains maximum to all other activities.going to work takes 2 percent time firstly but after reaching to work got 7 percent time from the old workers.and all other activities remains between these percentages in their specific year.
Gowing out with friends or family was around 19 percent in 1958 but it decreased by 13 percent in 2008 In the other hand playing of sports almost remained same in both years because workers had very short time for physical activities .
working and relaxing at home both inclined from 33percent and 8percent to 42percent and 13percent respectively.Sleeping had declined about 7percent as it was 32percent in 1958 and 25percent in 2008 .while traveling to work increasd after passage of time by 5 percent.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features, but the analysis is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, the statement that working 'remains maximum to all other activities' is unclear, and the description of the data is inconsistent. The report lacks a clear overview of the most significant trends, such as the shift from leisure to work-related activities. Several figures are mentioned, but the comparisons are poorly structured, making it difficult for the reader to follow the changes between 1958 and 2008. To improve, you should focus on grouping related data logically and ensuring that the comparisons are mathematically accurate and clearly articulated.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or incorrect, such as 'In the other hand' (should be 'On the other hand') and 'after passage of time'. The progression of ideas is disjointed, and the lack of clear linking words between sentences makes the flow of information feel repetitive. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when discussing the percentages. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of cohesive devices more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, central topic that flows logically into the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors in word choice and form. Examples include 'time spended' (should be 'time spent'), 'old workers' (which is inappropriate for 'working adults'), and 'inclined' (used incorrectly to mean 'increased'). There is also a lack of variety in reporting verbs and descriptive language. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the frequent errors in collocation and word formation hinder the sophistication of the response. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise terms for describing trends—such as 'rose,' 'declined,' 'remained stable,' or 'fluctuated'—would significantly improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('pie graphs shows'), incorrect verb forms ('time spended'), and missing articles or prepositions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and incorrect capitalization. While the errors do not completely prevent understanding, they occur frequently enough to cause strain for the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and practicing the use of articles and prepositions in a formal context.
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