Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given chart show the working of adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, the graphs show the minimmum and maximum percentage of diffrent activites they spent time and work them.

in 1958 they spent more time on work and some time sleeping

spent some timw with family and they spent some time relax at home some time spent in travling and some time spent in playing sports

in 2008 maximum time spent in working the working time is increas the sleaping time is decreas the relaxing time is increas and the travling and playing sport time is increas in 1958,working petcentage is 33% in 2008,it increas in 42% the sleaping percentage in 1958 is 32% it decreas in 2008 in 13% travling to work in 1958 is 2% it in cread

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have attempted to identify some trends, the analysis is incomplete and lacks a clear overview of the main features. The data provided is fragmented, and the description of the changes between 1958 and 2008 is inconsistent and lacks precision. To improve, ensure you provide a clear summary of the most significant changes and support your points with accurate data from the charts. The current response is too brief to adequately cover the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. The paragraphs are poorly defined, and there is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas together. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt, and the information is presented in a list-like fashion rather than as a cohesive report. To improve, use linking words such as 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' to connect your sentences and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus. The current lack of paragraphing and logical flow makes the text difficult to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are numerous spelling errors, such as 'minimmum', 'diffrent', 'sleaping', 'travling', and 'petcentage', which hinder readability. You rely on basic verbs like 'spent' and 'increase' without demonstrating a range of vocabulary suitable for describing data trends. To improve, focus on learning synonyms for 'increase' (e.g., 'rose', 'climbed', 'surged') and 'decrease' (e.g., 'fell', 'dropped', 'declined'). Additionally, ensure you use precise terminology for describing percentages and time periods to enhance the professional tone of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the given chart show'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. The sentence structures are simple and often fragmented, lacking the complexity required for higher bands. For example, 'the working time is increas' should be 'working time increased'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct tense usage for past data, and proofread your work to correct simple errors in punctuation and word form.

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