Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The two pie charts illustrate how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, there was a significant rise on the proportion of the time spent working. In contrast, there was a sharp decline on the proportion of time spent on going out with friends and family. Meanwhile, time spent relaxing at home and traveling to work experienced a marginal increment.

In 1958, working adults spent 19% of their day's time going out with friends and family. This number decreased gradually to 6% in 2008. By contrast, only 2% of their time was spent traveling to work in 1958, although this increased to 7% in 2008. Similarly, time spent sleeping accounted for 32% in 1958. This figure fell to 25% by the end of 2008.

Moreover, time spent relaxing at home represented 8% in 1958, which increased to 13% in 2008. Time spent working, on the other hand, accounted for 33% in 1958. This number rose to 42% by the end of 2008. Nevertheless, time spent playing sports represented 6% in 1958, before increasing to 7% in 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response effectively addresses the task by identifying the main features and making relevant comparisons between 1958 and 2008. You have successfully highlighted the key trends, such as the rise in working time and the decline in social activities. The overview is clear and provides a good summary of the data. To reach a higher band, ensure that you consistently use accurate terminology; for instance, 'marginal increment' is used to describe traveling to work, which actually increased from 2% to 7%—a significant change rather than a marginal one. Overall, the response covers all parts of the task well.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs that group the data effectively. You use cohesive devices such as 'In contrast,' 'Meanwhile,' 'By contrast,' and 'Moreover' to guide the reader through the information. The progression of ideas is smooth, and the paragraphing is appropriate. The use of referencing is generally clear, though the flow could be slightly improved by varying the sentence structures further to avoid a repetitive 'subject-verb-number' pattern in the body paragraphs.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly. Phrases like 'significant rise,' 'sharp decline,' and 'accounted for' are used appropriately. However, there are some minor collocation issues, such as 'rise on the proportion' (should be 'rise in the proportion') and 'decline on the proportion' (should be 'decline in the proportion'). While you use some less common vocabulary, further development in using more precise academic collocations would enhance the sophistication of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0

The response shows a good control of grammar with a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. Most sentences are error-free, and the punctuation is accurate. There are occasional minor errors, such as the preposition usage mentioned in the lexical section ('rise on' instead of 'rise in'). You have used a variety of structures, such as 'By contrast, only 2% of their time was spent..., although this increased to 7%,' which demonstrates good control. The errors present are non-systematic and do not impede communication.

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