Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts compare the proportion of working adults in a specific country who spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, the majority of adults were involved in working in both years, while travelling to work accounted for the least in 1958, which slightly increased in 2008. The percentage of the day spent by people on sleeping decreased over the period.

The working activity accounted for the largest proportion of the days spent by people among both years. However, it slightly increased in 2008 with 42 percent from 33 percent. Similarly, the number of days spent sleeping was also recorded in large proportions. By contrast, the percentage of days spent on sleeping decreased in 2008 from 32 percent in 1958 to 25 percent.

Furthermore, 19 percent of days were spent on going out with friends and family in 1958, which drastically decreased to only 6 percent in 2008. Relaxing at home reported 13 percent in 2008, which was initially 8 percent in 1958. People used to spend only 2 percent of their total days on travelling to work; however, it increased to notable 7 percent in 2008

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features and provided a clear overview of the trends. You covered all categories and made relevant comparisons between the two years. However, there are some inaccuracies in your reporting. For instance, you state that 'working activity accounted for the largest proportion... in both years', but the data shows sleeping was the largest category in 1958. Additionally, your phrasing 'number of days spent' is slightly inaccurate as the charts represent percentages of a 24-hour day, not a count of days. To reach a higher band, ensure your data interpretation is precise and avoid confusing percentages with absolute counts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'However', 'Similarly', and 'By contrast' to guide the reader through the data. Paragraphing is used effectively to separate different categories of information. The progression of ideas is generally smooth, though some transitions feel slightly mechanical. To improve, try to vary your cohesive devices further and ensure that the link between sentences is always logical, particularly when moving between the two years of data.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'accounted for', 'drastically', and 'notable'. There are some minor issues with collocation and word choice, such as 'the number of days spent' instead of 'the proportion of time spent' and 'the largest proportion of the days spent by people among both years'. While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the use of more sophisticated, precise language. Focusing on collocations related to data description will help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. Most of your sentences are clear, and your meaning is easy to follow. There are some minor grammatical slips, such as 'with 42 percent from 33 percent' (which is slightly awkward phrasing) and 'it increased to notable 7 percent' (missing an article: 'a notable 7 percent'). Despite these occasional errors, your control of grammar is generally good and does not hinder the reader's understanding of the information presented.

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