Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie charts indicates the duration of adult working on the different types of activity between 1958 and 2008.

Overall, both the time period indicates the portion working represent the maximum coverage and spending the time period with family and friends was decrease drastically.

In1958, About 32% of old age people portion represent seeping although the working percent was more by one percent. For instance 33%. Secondly, popular of going out with friends/alternatives was approximately about 19%. Likewise, Relaxing at home was about 8% while travelling to work represent 3%

In 2008, The working day by senior citizen was increase by 42% . Further, relaxing at home was increase up to 13% in contrast

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. While you have attempted to identify some main features, the analysis is incomplete and lacks a comprehensive comparison of the data. Several key categories from the charts are omitted, and the description of the data is often inaccurate or confusing (e.g., referring to 'old age people' when the prompt specifies 'working adults'). To improve, ensure you cover all categories provided in the charts and provide a more detailed summary that highlights the most significant trends and contrasts between the two years.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into short paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes misused, such as 'In1958' and 'Secondly', which do not effectively link the ideas. The transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is abrupt. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', 'Conversely') to connect sentences and ideas more naturally. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and that the information flows logically from one point to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic structures to describe the data. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'seeping' (likely meant 'sleeping') and 'popular of going out'. The phrasing is often unnatural, which hinders the clarity of the report. To improve, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary for describing trends, such as 'increased significantly', 'remained stable', or 'accounted for'. Avoid using informal or inaccurate terms when describing statistical data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('The pie charts indicates', 'the working day... was increase') and sentence structure. The use of articles and prepositions is often incorrect or missing. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically tense consistency and subject-verb agreement. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms will help improve the overall accuracy of your writing.

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