Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

This pie charts illustrate the proption of day spent by working adults on various activities in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, working accounted for largest proption, whereas travelling and sports represented smallest share. Over the period, working increased considerably, While playing sports remained relatively stable.

In 1958, working accounted for the largest share at 33 percent. This was followed by sleeping with 32 percent and going out with friends or family at 19 percent . whereas, the playing sports and relaxing at home stood at 7 and 8 precent respectively. By contrast travelling to work represented the smallest propotion, at just 2 percent.

By 2008, the distribution had changed considerably. working had risen to 42 percent, while going out with family and friends plummeted from 19 percent to 6 percent. moreover sleeping had also plunged to 25 percent .However, travelling to work and relaxing at home has surged to 7 percent and 13 percent respectively. Meanwhile, playing sports remained relatively unchanged at 7 percent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all requirements of the task. You have successfully identified the main features and provided comparisons between the two years, such as the increase in working hours and the decline in socialising. The overview is clear and highlights the most significant trends. However, the report could be improved by ensuring all data points are accurate and by avoiding minor inconsistencies in the reporting of figures. For instance, ensure that the percentages mentioned align precisely with the data provided in the charts to maintain full accuracy throughout the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organised with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'By contrast', 'By 2008', and 'Meanwhile' to guide the reader through the information. Paragraphing is used effectively to separate the years. To reach a higher band, ensure that the transition between sentences is smoother and that the use of cohesive devices does not feel slightly repetitive. The logical progression is generally sound, making the information easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'accounted for', 'plummeted', 'surged', and 'distribution'. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'proption' (proportion) and 'precent' (percent), which occur multiple times. These errors are noticeable and detract from the overall quality of the writing. To improve, focus on proofreading for common spelling mistakes and try to incorporate a slightly wider variety of synonyms to describe trends, such as 'witnessed a significant rise' instead of 'had risen'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'This pie charts' (should be 'These pie charts'), 'has surged' (should be 'had surged' to match the past tense context), and inconsistent capitalisation (e.g., 'working' vs 'Working'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of commas and periods. Increasing the frequency of error-free sentences and ensuring consistent tense usage would significantly improve your score in this criterion.

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