Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie charts provide the informations about how working adults in a particular nation spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Overall, in both years working category dominate the chart.
It is crystal clear from the chart, in 1958 the portion of spending time on going out with family and friends was 19%. The maximum percentages in 1958 was hold by working which was 33%. Moreover, the lowest numbers were obtained by travelling to work, which was 2%. However, the next information were about sleeping with 32%. The last evidence were about relaxing at home and it obtained 8% of portion.
Remaining data shows that, the next year was 2008, in it the maximum propotion were taken by working field which was 42%. Although, the minimum percentage was in going out with family ,with 6%. Next both categories which was playing sports and travelling to work shows the similarity with 7%. Additionally, the second highest portion were hold by sleeping which was 25%. Last evidence of the year 2008 was relaxing at home and 13% of masses spent their time in it.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts and makes relevant comparisons between 1958 and 2008. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, listing figures rather than synthesizing trends. For instance, while you mention the increase in working hours from 33% to 42%, the comparison could be more analytical. The overview is present but lacks a clear summary of the most significant shifts, such as the decline in social time versus the increase in work. To improve, focus on grouping data points to highlight trends rather than describing each category in isolation. The response meets the requirements of the task but lacks the depth of analysis required for a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression from the introduction to the body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover', 'However', and 'Additionally' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel forced or repetitive, such as 'The last evidence were' and 'Remaining data shows that'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. To reach a higher band, try to vary your cohesive devices and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data comparison.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is somewhat repetitive and lacks precision. Phrases like 'maximum percentages... was hold by' and 'last evidence were' are unnatural. You rely on basic descriptors and struggle with collocations, such as using 'masses' to refer to the population, which is not appropriate in this context. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary to describe data, such as 'accounted for', 'constituted', or 'witnessed a significant rise'. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' will also help improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('the next information were', 'the maximum propotion were taken') and incorrect word forms ('informations', 'propotion'). While you attempt some complex sentence structures, they are often marred by these errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma placement. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and proofreading for common errors like pluralization. Reducing the number of errors in simple sentences will provide a stronger foundation before attempting more complex structures.
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