Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I will summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features of the pie chart that shows how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

If we look at the pie chart we can see that people spent more time going out with their family and friends in 1958 raughly more then 3 times in comparison to 2008 while in 2008 people spent 5 percent more time in travling to work.Sleeping also had a significant change in 2008 if we compare it to 1958 people spent 7 percent less time sleapingin 2008, although they spent 5 percent more time relaxing at home.Lets talk about working, we can see that people have spent 9 percent more time in working in 2008 then 1958. But if we look at sport we can see that people have spent only 1 percent less time playing sport in 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the charts, but the presentation is somewhat disjointed. While you identify key changes, such as the increase in working hours and the decrease in time spent with family, the report lacks a clear overview or summary of the most significant trends. The data points are mentioned, but the analysis is limited. To improve, ensure you group information logically—for example, by categorizing activities that increased versus those that decreased—and provide a clear introductory overview that highlights the most striking differences between 1958 and 2008.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow the logical progression of ideas. While there are some attempts at linking ideas (e.g., 'although', 'while'), the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes repetitive. The transition between sentences is abrupt, particularly with the phrase 'Lets talk about working', which is too informal for an academic task. To achieve a higher band, you should organize your response into distinct paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on specific trends, using a wider range of linking words to connect your sentences more smoothly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher levels. There are several spelling errors, such as 'raughly', 'travling', and 'sleapingin', which distract the reader. The phrasing is often simplistic, relying on basic verbs like 'spent' and 'look at'. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary to describe data, such as 'allocated', 'witnessed', 'experienced', or 'a significant rise/decline'. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you avoid repetitive sentence structures and demonstrate a better command of the language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'roughly more then 3 times' contains a comparative error ('then' instead of 'than') and awkward phrasing. There are also issues with punctuation and sentence boundaries, such as run-on sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement. Ensure you use the correct comparative forms and proofread carefully to eliminate minor slips in spelling and word choice that currently affect the overall accuracy of your writing.

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