Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie chart depicts the working routine of young people in foreign countries during last few years .This shows contrast in daily routine of young men in a day.lets analyse it from different angles. In 1958 ,we see the ratio of people spending time on sleeping and relaxing at home was about 32 and 8 percent .While the ratio of adults going out for work was about 2 percent which is low as compared to people working in 2008 . Similarly the ratio of young generations going out with families for enjoyment remains low in 2008 which was high in 1958.In 2008 ,the ratio of working young men has increased which was lower in 1958. If we look at ratio of adults relaxing at home is more in 2008 rather than in 1958.while a lower tendency has been depicted in sleeping hours in 2008 which was higher in 1958. Overall situation is better in 2008 rather than in 1958.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to accurately report the data provided in the charts. You have misidentified the subject as 'young people' rather than 'working adults' and incorrectly stated that the percentage of people working in 1958 was 2%. Furthermore, the analysis is vague and lacks specific data points to support the comparisons made. To improve, ensure you carefully read the prompt and accurately transcribe the figures from the diagrams. Avoid subjective commentary such as 'lets analyse it from different angles' or 'Overall situation is better', as Task 1 requires an objective summary of the information presented.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. The paragraphing is inconsistent, with large gaps and a lack of clear separation between the introduction, body, and conclusion. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices like 'Similarly' and 'Overall', they are used to connect ideas that are not clearly presented or factually accurate. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow because the comparisons between 1958 and 2008 are repetitive and lack a clear focus. Improving the use of linking words and organizing the response into distinct paragraphs for different trends would significantly enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on the word 'ratio' to describe percentages. There are also issues with word choice, such as referring to 'young generations' instead of 'working adults'. The language used is informal and lacks the precision required for an academic report. To reach a higher band, you should use a wider variety of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' (e.g., 'rose', 'declined', 'fluctuated') and use more precise terminology to describe statistical data, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', or 'figure'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with article usage (e.g., 'in a day'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or awkwardly phrased, such as 'If we look at ratio of adults relaxing at home is more in 2008'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with irregular spacing and missing commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect prepositions.

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