Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates the proportion of time that working adults in a particular country spent on different activities in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, it is clear that working was the most time-consuming activity in both years, and it proportion over the period. In contrast the time spent sleeping and going out with friends and family decreased. while relaxing at home and travelling to work became more significant.

In 1958, sleeping and working were the two main activities, taking up 33% and 32% of the day respectively. Going out with friends and family made up around 19%, while relaxing at home accounted for 8%. Traveling to work took least time, at only 2%.

By 2008, the proportion of working activities had risen significantly to 42%. Sleeping feel to 25% and going out with close-knit dropped sharply to 6%. whereas, relaxing at residents increased to 13%, and traveling to work rose to 7%. New category of activity, playing sports, also appeared and accounted for 7% respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all key features of the pie charts, including the main trends and specific data points for both years. You successfully identified the most significant changes, such as the increase in working hours and the decline in sleep. However, the overview is slightly underdeveloped; while you mention the main trends, it could be more precise. Additionally, there is a minor error in the data reporting: you state that 'playing sports' appeared in 2008, but the prompt implies a comparison of existing categories. Ensure that all data points are accurately transcribed, as 'respectively' was used incorrectly when referring to a single category. Overall, the response is clear and fulfills the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and two body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'while', and 'whereas' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by mechanical phrasing and some awkward transitions. For instance, the second sentence in the overview is grammatically fragmented. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the years, which helps the reader follow the progression of information. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of cohesive devices more naturally and ensure that sentences are fully connected rather than relying on simple conjunctions.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'time-consuming', and 'accounted for'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'sleeping feel to 25%' (should be 'fell') and 'relaxing at residents' (should be 'residence' or 'home'). The phrase 'going out with close-knit' is also incomplete and unnatural. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points, they indicate a need for more precise control over collocations and word forms. Expanding your vocabulary to include more varied descriptors for trends would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt to use complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors that detract from the quality of the writing. Examples include 'it proportion over the period' (missing verb), 'Sleeping feel to 25%' (incorrect verb form), and 'New category of activity... appeared and accounted for 7% respectively' (misuse of 'respectively'). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but the sentence structure in the overview is disjointed. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensuring that every sentence has a clear, complete structure. Reducing these frequent errors will significantly improve your score.

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