Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The Pie Chats illustrates how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Here is the summarise information in 1958 adults mostly spent their time in office at work by 33% and after the work they huge portion of their day they while sleeping 32% of the day and after that they consume their rest of the time 19% with their friends and family by going out and they spend 8% of the day time by relaxing at home. and in the remaining 2% they spent in travelling by going to work.
Where we see the 2008 pie chart where adults mostly spent their time at work by 47% after that they invest the time on their sleep 25% and after that they consume their time of the day by relaxing at home by 13% of the day and after that they spent their remaining time in playing sports 7% and then going out with their friend 6% and travelling to work by 7% this is how in 2008 adults spent their whole day.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying key trends such as the increase in work time and the decrease in sleep. However, the report lacks a clear overview or summary statement, which is essential for a high band score. The information is presented as a list of data points rather than a comparative analysis. While the data is accurate, the lack of synthesis and the absence of a clear structure to highlight the most significant changes mean the response does not fully develop the task requirements. To improve, you should group information logically and provide a clear summary of the main trends at the beginning.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the internal flow is weak. The use of cohesive devices is repetitive and mechanical, relying heavily on 'after that' and 'and'. There is a lack of variety in linking words, which makes the progression of ideas feel disjointed. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between the two years is abrupt. To improve, use a wider range of cohesive devices such as 'in contrast', 'meanwhile', 'subsequently', or 'whereas' to connect your ideas more fluidly and show the relationship between the data points.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'spent their time' and 'consume their time' are used repeatedly, which restricts the range. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'invest the time on their sleep', which is not natural English. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of variety and the misuse of certain terms prevent a higher score. You should aim to use more precise verbs and nouns related to data description, such as 'allocated', 'devoted', 'proportion', or 'figure'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The Pie Chats illustrates') and incorrect verb tenses ('they spent in travelling'). Sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with run-on sentences and missing commas. These errors occasionally impede the flow of reading. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and incorporating a mix of complex structures, such as relative clauses or subordinate clauses, to demonstrate greater grammatical control.
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