Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart illustrates that how working adults in a particular country spent their time in year 1958 and 2008. Overall, it is clear that the year 2008 has more working period of adults., while 1958 experienced downward movement of working. Looking the details, in 1958 the adults use to work at 33% which was lower than the 2008 has risen at 42% of working. Than the adults sleeping hours was 32% in 1958 and also same at 2008 . The adults who travel to work was 9% in 1958 and decreased in 7% at 2008.The adults spent their time by relaxing at home at 8% in 1958 and also same in 2008 as 1958 . In contrast the adults who spent their time with their families and friends it was much higher than the 2008 in 1958 it was 8% and 2008 adults spent thier time at 4%. The next is the adults spent thier day by playing sports at the 1958 they do not spent by playing so in the 2008 adults spent their time by playing it is 7%. So it is clear that the year 2008 has high standards and things as 2008 .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the pie charts, such as the increase in working hours and the decrease in time spent with family. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks a clear, professional overview. While you identified some trends, the report relies heavily on listing percentages rather than synthesizing the data to make meaningful comparisons. The concluding sentence is vague and does not effectively summarize the key shifts in lifestyle over the fifty-year period. To improve, focus on grouping related data points and highlighting the most significant changes rather than describing each category in isolation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is often mechanical and repetitive. You use basic linking words like 'Looking the details' and 'In contrast', but the progression of ideas is hindered by awkward phrasing and a lack of sophisticated cohesive devices. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the final sentence where the comparison to '2008' is confusing. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks logical development, making the text feel like a list of observations rather than a cohesive report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic verbs like 'spent', 'work', and 'playing'. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'downward movement of working' instead of 'a decrease in working hours' and 'high standards and things' which is imprecise. Spelling errors, such as 'thier' instead of 'their', also occur. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'witnessed a significant rise'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the adults use to work'), incorrect preposition usage (e.g., 'decreased in 7%'), and awkward sentence structures (e.g., 'the year 2008 has more working period of adults'). While you attempt to use complex sentences, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. The punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces and missing commas. Focusing on basic sentence construction and ensuring correct verb tenses will help improve your accuracy.
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