Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The pie charts illustrate the percentages of the day spent by working adults on various activities in 1958 and 2008.
Overall, adults spend the highest percentage of their time on on working and the second most highest was sleeping, however it decreased after over the period. Adult spend the lowest proportion of time on travelling to work and wit friends/family.
In 1958, adult spend the highest percentage of their time on working, it accounted for 33%, while they spend only 2% of their time on travelling. Sleeping activity consumed second highest 32% of their time. They spend 7% of their time on sports and spend their 8% time on relaxing at home.
In 2008, working hours increased 42%, while workers spend time on going out with friends and family members, which decreased 6%. Travelling and sleeping activities increased for 7% and 25%. Sports activity consumed 7% of their time and remained same.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts and makes relevant comparisons. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, you state that sleeping decreased to 25% in 2008, but the chart shows it remained at 32%. Similarly, you mention travelling increased to 7% and sleeping to 25%, which misrepresents the provided figures. While you identify the main trends, the lack of precision in data interpretation prevents a higher score. To improve, ensure that every figure cited is double-checked against the source material to maintain factual accuracy.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In 1958' and 'In 2008', which help the reader follow the chronological progression. However, the connection between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the flow is interrupted by grammatical errors. For example, the transition 'however it decreased after over the period' is clunky. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the overall coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to describe the charts clearly. You use terms like 'accounted for', 'proportion', and 'consumed', which are appropriate for academic writing. However, there are some word choice errors, such as 'most highest' (a redundancy) and 'remained same' (missing an article). To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' would also demonstrate a more sophisticated command of the language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'adult spend' instead of 'adults spent') and incorrect preposition usage (e.g., 'increased for 7%'). Additionally, there are tense inconsistencies, such as using the present tense 'spend' when discussing 1958 data. To improve, focus on consistent verb tense usage and proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement errors. Increasing the variety of complex structures while maintaining accuracy is essential for a higher band score.
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